September 6, 2010
memoir monday #2
I remember the day when my cousin called me to my cell phone and asked me if I wanted to go do a photo shoot with the children in FANLIC, a place were they keep the kids with cancer that need treatments, care, love, and don’t have the sufficient money from the interior. When I first walked into FANLIC I thought those kids would be all depressed, but I was wrong. When I got to meet them, they were like the happiest kids you could meet. Even though they were sick, they were happier than me and you (however is reading this) could be.
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I like the general theme of your story, but maybe you could express yourself more like for example why you think they are happier than you and me.
ReplyDeleteGreat Memoir Monday!
ReplyDeleteI agree with Isabella. I believe it would make your story much better if you put you put more of your feelings and thoughts into this.
I like the parenthasis you used. It was great.
Keep it up Mafe :)
Great story!
ReplyDeleteI also think you should put more details and feelings into this, but its great :) keep it up mafe!
you have a great idea and everything, but i think you should put more details about how you feel..
ReplyDeletegood memoir and idea but make it longer and add details mafe cafe!!!
ReplyDeleteAwsome story!!!!!!!!!! Just give it a bit of details.
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